The Artist

4.32

I wake up to go hang out at your house. You are a good boyfriend. I love you and I believe you love me too. You do so much for me. I think you are an amazing guy. Talking with you in the morning is wonderful. You have no idea how much I love you. You are always there for me. I am in my room getting dressed. Underpants are not the only thing I need, I need a shirt, bra, and pants as well. Trees and birds are chirping as I look out my window. Why is nature so happy? It is weird to me. I get in the car and drive over to your house.

I want to do art today. My canvas can be your body, my paintbrush will be my knife. It will be fun, I do art on myself all the time. Maybe we can paint each other. I would find that to be very nice. Your body has the perfect curves and contours, a perfect canvas for my artwork. I want to do my art on your skin. I want to paint my love words on your body. Will you be my canvas? It will show my love for you… People don’t like when I make art on myself. I think it is beautiful and it gives me so much energy and I feel like nothing can stop me. It is taking more and more artwork to keep this energy flowing.

I can’t stop. My art makes me feel so good. When I do my art on others it feels even better than on myself. It is such a strong, beautiful feeling. I never feels as energized as when I’m doing my artwork. I haven’t let you know about the art, I guess I should be more open. I keep my art to myself because people already look down on me when they see the art on my arms and face. People never seem to like my art. I don’t know why. I think it is beautiful. I love your body. Tomorrow I will turn you into a piece of art.

I wake up the next morning. I get my paintbrush knife and start drawing a beautiful picture into your body, it is a wonderful piece of paper. You wake up and start screaming. You can’t move because you are tied to the bed. Once when we were kissing you told me you like being tied to the bed. I am only doing what you like. After you realize you can’t move you stop screaming and just lay there. I paint a heart on your skin because I love you. The paint is such a bright, beautiful red. I am going to draw a puppy next. Dogs are your favorite animals. I love watching the paint drip down people I have done my artwork on. I can’t stop. Their blood is so beautiful. It is so glossy, it makes the perfect painting medium. My art gives me such good feelings… I feel so energized when I see them struggle. It feels so good. I truly love painting.

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Carmen Lopez
Wow. This is an amazing story. I love it.😁
- Britney Owenby
  Thank you.😆
KillingTime69
Weak.
- Britney Owenby
  How would you reccomend me to make my writing better? 🙂 I would appreciate constructive feedback 🙂
hehehehe hehehehe
Or,you know…
Just use a canvas
Ray Ramirez
Don’t listen to rude comments, it wasn’t weak. I don’t really have constructive feedback, but maybe suggest trying to add a few more commas instead of making it sentence by sentence? It’d make the story flow a little easier. I liked the story though.
- KillingTime69
  hey, i’m just straightforward man.
  - Ray Ramirez
    That why you edited your comment? That wasn’t straight forward it was just rude, you can give constructive feedback in other ways. Like simply telling her you didn’t like it and why, not “it was weak”
Friendly Neighborhood Writer M
I like the idea behind it, especially the psycho nature and her inner monologuing. Grammar could use some work, also I’d suggest using apostrophes in words, like It’s and such, to help it sound more natural. All in all not bad but improvement is needed. Hope this helps.
- Britney Owenby
  Thank you☺
  - Friendly Neighborhood Writer M
    If you’d like I’d be happy to proofread and such for you if you want, not to sound stand offish though lol, just always willing to help out another writer 🙂
    - Britney Owenby
      I’d appreciate that☺
      - Friendly Neighborhood Writer M
        Awesome, what would you prefer sending me the stories with Google or something else?
Joseph Palmer
I really like the concept and story. It is well written and thought out. I would have liked for a switch in thought at the end where she thinks about her next “boyfriend,” where she dumps this guy (in more than one way) or something like that. But, overall, good job, and keep doing what you are doing.
- Britney Owenby
  Thanks☺
Britney Owenby
I was wondering if I could edit and repost the story… If that is possible how do I do it?
- Ray Ramirez
  Go to your page where you publish stories and find the name of it. Then just click “edit”.
  - Britney Owenby
    Thank you☺
    - Ray Ramirez
      You’re welcome 🙂
Dorkave
6/10 – one of the few things i liked about this story was the personal aspect to it. for example, in the last bit, we are given details about the “boyfriend” that are then given a comparsion to the psychotic antics of the main character. however, the flow was pretty neck-break and if the monologue was more subtle and provided a deeper look into the thoughts of the main character it could have been better. the flow feeds into this, basically. if the flow were a bit better and the writing was a more of a subtle yet slightly disturbing mix that got a bit angrier the more and more the story progressed, it could be a solid eight.
- Britney Owenby
  Thanks for your feedback☺
Britney Owenby
Ok. Thanks for the feedback☺
R4bbit
Really good story
Killer bunny
Good story I liked it but the self harm might trigger some people
Daniel Di Benedetto
I think this was amazing. I was wide-eyed the whole time I was reading it. I’m not sure what it is that you did so well, but the character was just so… real. So, ominously, real. It was morbidly poetic, and paradoxically beautiful. Great work.

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